Quiñonez Yenny
Intermediate English III
Prof. Pablo Acosta Acosta
Writing Task 01
October 8,2010
My best friend should be someone reliable.
I think about this question the most important in a good friend is to find confidence, affection and overall respect. These things do one reliable friend. Maybe you can find someone very intelligent but, if this person don`t share his knowledge it isn`t of use. You can find also someone with a good sense of humor but if she doesn`t have good humans values and doesn`t inspire you confidence she isn`t of use either.
When you need the support from someone and you need that this person give you an advise is better that the person know about yours feelings and your personality, perhaps another person can cause you a lot of damage, “The world is full of dangerous and disguising monsters who hope see you in a bad moment to devour you” for all that I think the most important in a friendship is the confidence and the truth.
I also think that in a friendship should be very important the humility. A good friend should know to forgive, sometimes you can lose a good person only for your pried, it gives you only sadness and obviously wrinkles in your beautiful face.
For example when you have a difficulty with your friend the best is not feel you ugly with him or don`t talk. The best for me is to comprehend and to analyze together the situation. It is really a reliable friend.
For ending my essay, I want to say that you should open your heart to the people and give always the best from you but if this person doesn`t appreciate it. Don`t suffer for that! You will find another person who really loves you and probably this way you will find your best and reliable friend.
Well, first at all, I think the main idea of your essay is quite right,nevertheless there are some mistakes. I found these:(it isn`t of use), (You can find also someone), ( the best is not feel you ugly with him) and wrong choices of words like (damage) or (pried), this last it was a mistake of typing I think, it's not a big deal.
ReplyDelete(NC(?))not clear, (P)punctuation.
I think you made these mistakes because you are translating literally from Spanish to English.
My recommendation to you is: you have to keep practising, you know, readings, audios, conversations and I'm sure you'll improve your English learning; so, keep going, don´t look back and never give up.
You are a nice girl, I appreciate you and I know you'll overcome all your difficulties, just keep working, little by little, step by step, just as you've been doing it and you'll go far.
And remember, don't let anyone influence you!